Yesternight, Ch. 1

The first part of this chapter read a little clipped to me. I think it was the single sentence statements following each other. Then when you got to the fight with Maria's coven, things became detailed and as smooth as his movements through the fight. So I am wondering if the beginning was so disconnected, for lack of a better word, was done on purpose.

By the time we got to the fight, I didn't have the emotional investment between Carlisle and Edward that I wished I had. It would have made Edward's desire to get to Carlisle and save him all the more powerful.

I like what you have set up here, though, plot wise. Looking forward to see where this goes.

Deep Dish, Ch. 8

I really enjoyed Jacey's POV. I am not surprised by any of the emotion he expresses, but I love it coming from a voice that is distinctly his.

I was kind of surprised there were no lemons, but the tenor of the chapter makes it fine without it. Though you did hit us with the knowledge they did sleep together after the planetarium, it fits with Jacey's southern gentleman personality to not kiss & tell during his chapter, if you know what I mean.

Marked, Ch. 12

What a perfect moment for them to finally give themselves to each other! After an evening of both of them getting a true glimpse of what "real life" could be with each other. To see the fantasy. It was beautiful, caring, and iced with a bit of raw lust.

So happy that Jasper is finally opening up about Paul! It was a little glimpse, but it is a start. As Edward has come to realize, it will be a slow, gradual process with Jasper. Thank goodness he is a patient man! Good things come to those who wait.

At The Deep End, Ch. 24

It is so hard watching someone you love go through something and not knowing how or not being allowed to comfort them. You write Edward's helplessness beautifully. Wanting so desperately to "fix it", yet not being allowed access at all. I am so happy you made him patient until Jasper was ready.

I was so happy that you had Rose, Emmett, and Edward's parents there, and Esme push her way in as a mom...a loving mom would do.

The ending of this chapter was perfect. After Jasper received a physical and emotional beat down for his love of Edward, they both needed that connection, to feel the REAL love that makes it all worth while. I hope that Jasper feels the forever Edward wants with him.

Red Corvette, Ch. 2

You completely deserved a prize in the Slash/Backslash contest! I loved your story and happily voted for you! I have to admit, that I loved this side of the coin even more! How many young boys/girls "fake" their sexuality for years before they are strong enough emotionally to be who they are? Sad that we don't live in a society where they feel loved and comfortable enough by society for being themselves from day one.

I loved living in Emmett's head while he figured out what it was he was feeling, or not feeling, as the cases were. So happy he took the chance in the end and realized that risking for a true friend, a true love, is worth it all. You'll never lose with that type of risk.

Seven Minutes in Heaven, Ch. 14

They moved in together! I like that you had them do some redecorating, because I think when you do move into a space that one member of the couple previously occupied, it would be hard to not think of it as "their space". It is always interesting, too, the things you learn about someone by living with them. I liked that Jasper was such a neat freak, yet they found their compromise in Edward's desk being his domain. :)

Looking forward to see where the boys go from here!

Deep Dish, Ch. 7

I love the journey you are taking these two on. Now that Jack is falling, I do think that the distance is going to cause more stress than it did before. I love the excitement I felt in reading the start of this chapter, and the contentedness that I felt once they settled into the evening. I love a good reformed skeptic. :)

I am looking forward to see how their week together plays out.

New Boy Blues, Ch. 3

I love that these are real teenagers in your story. You write the awkwardness so well. I can see that Bella is either going to be a hindrance to Edward and Jasper coming together, because Edward will misconceive that they are a couple. OR Bella will be a help in befriending Edward, and therefore, act as a bridge between Edward and Jasper.

I have a feeling that this will be the first of many speedy accents home for Jasper. Ahhh...teenage infatuation. :)

Seven Minutes in Heaven, Ch. 1-13

This is such a great ExJ story! It has been wonderful, so far, watching them run the gamut of discovering their own sexuality to discovering each other to looking towards the future.

I love how steadfast in their devotion to each other that Edward and Jasper are through most of this story. That they celebrate the good times and whether the bad times together. I like that you did have them apart for a while. Jasper needed that to discover himself as a man before he could be that man for Edward. Though they were apart, they were suffering together.

Now, they are headed towards happier times. The future. I loved this last chapter in Texas. Especially Granny Hale. :) We all need a woman like her in our lives.

I can't wait to read more!