Mr. Horrible, Ch. 26-28Chapter 26
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Your description of Edward's morning shenanigans through Bella's eyes was hi-larious!
Once again, you make me adore your story and your characters with their honesty. If it is all going to go to shit, let it be done on an honest wafer. Yet, they keep getting stronger. Love it.
Chapter 27
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It is hard to remember at times that this relationship is not even 2 months old. Sometimes I find myself wondering, "Why are they doubting the other, or why isn't the other doubting their intentions?" or "Why don't they know better?" Oh yeah, because they haven't gotten that far.
Once again, the cleverness of their banter leaves me in awe.
Chapter 28
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The fucking fish spits the engagement ring into her hand. That's perfect...for them. Birkin should be the one who proposes.
I loved how pissy Edward and Laurent were with Bella, when they thought she was selling out to the man's ideal of a perfect future Mrs. Edward Cullen the Not-Quite-Second.
Now that they are in-line for some permanence, it will be interesting to see if/how it affects their relationship.
Tropic of Virgo, ch 27Word Association: twilight: orange
I'm about ready to punch these two in their poetry until it falls from their lips and not just their fingertips. I am sure you have a plan, and I don't want to know it, but I am getting a bruise on my forehead with these two.
This chapter was a heartfail of communication failure. I need to find some happy on my update list to counterbalance this. Not sure if I have any, though...
The writing remains great.
Tropic of Virgo, ch 26Who I would be for a week: one of my children. So I could see how I am doing from their perspective. I just know I am paying for therapy someday.
I loathed the fact that Edward feels the need to conform when it comes to this relationship. Mr. Do-My-Own-Thing doesn't fit into rules. They are conventional, and that is what makes them great. They are at their best, when they relax and are themselves, which is intelligent and a little wild. You can see that contrast in this chapter. Hopefully they continue to define and create their relationship on their own terms.
Sleepers, Awake: Wachet auf, ruft uns die Stimme, Ch. 1-7
algonquinrt recommended this fic to me (and all of Twitterland). So far, you have all of my favorite elements: unrequited love, despair, and fantasy.
The best thing about your story though...is that that I have NO idea where this story is going or what is going to happen next. Too many stories in FFdom, I have pegged within the first few chapters. You can tell how the story will arc, and how it is going to end. With this one, I have NO idea, and it has me completely enthralled.
I love the dance between her real world, and this fantasy realm when she sleeps. I am equally interested in both lands she is living in. I would assume the wolves in her dreams are the ones that she draws, but like I said. I am not assuming anything with this story.
You are doing such a fantastic job! Completely original.
A Murmur of Fire in the Vein, ch 10I am so happy that Bella allowed herself to open up to Angela about everything that has been going on with Jasper. I would be terribly sad if she felt she had to hide things from her best friend. That should be a warning sign for her right there that things were bad. Hopefully, Angela will remain the supportive friend she is today through it all. I have a feeling Bella will need her eventually.
The love making scene wasn't long, but it was so powerful. I felt my own eyes tearing up. I completely imagine Jasper to be an intense lover. The type that would hold you close with his eyes bearing down into your soul.
Art After 5, ch 33You are right that there is absolutely nothing to do where Bella went to college! Though, she would be close to Boyd & Werthmann's and their 26 kinds of pie! Snacks after smoking up!
This chapter was rather heart breaking. Edward is finally starting to understand Bella's concerns from before he left for school. He met her while living in a bubble of isolation. Now, he is surrounded by people he can relate to. People who match him intellectually, and are experiencing the same things as him for the first time. My chest is literally aching as I write this. I don't doubt his love for Bella, but they are at such different places. He hit the nail on the head that he is living to separate lives. Bella wants to be a part of his life, but has no interest in reliving college. It is one of those times you enjoy it, and move on. This relationship is going to be so difficult to maintain and keep both participants happy.
I might have to go cry now.
Art After 5, ch 32Well, we have already discussed the hypothetical shared experience of skull cracking during loft shenanigans. That was so great. Nice to know that Edward is mind blowing enough that Bella forgot where she was!
I am happy that Bella is going to seek some counseling. She obviously has some intimacy issues, and wants to get herself well, so she can honestly commit to Edward in every way that he wants and they deserve.
