The Arrangement, Ch. 22Awww...kisses. Two updates. Two thanks in Hopey author notes. You complete me. :)
What a sobering position for Alice to be in. She was at a crossroads in this chapter. She could have walked away from the mess of these three friends, but she patiently listened to their tragic tale of their fall from grace, and willingly walked into the vortex. I love this Alice. She is patient and kind. She is the calm for once.
Finally, Edward is leaving. It will be interesting to see how you play this one out. I trust you.
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I am happy we are entering more actively into the foray of Bella's abilities. We now have a murdered girl lurking. I am eager to see what role she plays. I have sone guesses.
Then, we have Bella being actively courted by two delicious men who are also pursuing each other. I love that you have made this a delicious arrangement instead of a love triangle...so far, anyways. :) You write glances and subtle sexuality very well.
Finally, you hit us with Jane! Can't wait to see what this means!
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Bella is going to work for the man. No good can ever come of the brothers & their guard, but we'll wait and see. I am excited that we will be seeing her powers unleashed, and how that intensifies her connection with Edward and Jacob. I could see the scene in the cemetery before my eyes as if I was looking at a movie coming to life.
OK, that feeding business is some of the hottest shit. It is the eroticism of penetration and taking someone into you, but on a whole different plane. Their external, physical closeness followed by Edward being nourished by what gives them life. Who knew that would be so damn sexy.
New Boy Blues, o/sThis was a beautiful tale of the makings of first love. This is the first J/E fic in which they are shy awkward teenagers. My favorite part is that their sexuality made them reserved and anxious about approaching each other, but was not the antithesis for any drama. We simply have to teenagers experimenting, not only with physical love, but dancing on the edge of their first experience with romantic love. This was sweet and shy and beautiful.
Loved it! Good luck in the contest, and I look forward to see more from you in the future!
We Three, Ch. 2I am glad you did not shirk in the face of complexity. This was a beautiful moment between these lovers. I loved how you didn't shy from the fact that these were two virgins, and allowed their insecurities and curiosities be known.
What a lovely first year.
Devil's Angel, Ch. 1I would love to know which bike Edward is riding. I see him on something vintage that he has fixed up, even though he could probably afford the newest top-of-the-line. I can always send some links, but knowing you, you have already researched this. :)
I like how you have already set up some sort of past for him. There is something public that he has been through, and a reason he shies away from people he may run into on a daily basis. Very intriguing!
I can't wait to go on this ride ::snicker:: with you!
All I Ever Knew, Ch. 21I totally forgot about this conversation until I started reading. :) I'm happy you used it. It worked well. Everything with the gift exchange was very casual and cute in their awkwardness and concern on the other liking their gift.
I felt a little tug at my own heart at Jasper's realization that his parent's house was no longer home, but Edward was. I can't wait to see how his telling his family plays out. Hopefully well, though it has been a while since you fed us any angst. ::gives you a leering stare::
Now for the couch business...I'm going to require Mr. Bethie to work out what that did to/for me. Damn, girl!
