The Misapprehension of Bella Swan, Ch. 22

This story is such a dance for me. In general, I can't do crackfic, and at times, this is borderline for me, but you dance just on that side of the line that it is just funny and not ridiculous.

At the same time that you amuse me, you leave me on fire and seeking out MrB. The moments when they are just quiet and enjoying each other are so sexy.

Love my hockeyward fix!

A Rough Start, Ch. 26

Edward really is starting to shift, yet part of him remains intrinsically the same. I love that you aren't having him morph into something he is not, or have some miraculous see the light change. His shifts are subtle, gradual. He is figuring out the job and responsibility of fatherhood gradually. He make mistakes. His judgment is clouded by his own past. He is chalk full of faults, which makes him one of the most approachable Edward's written.

I just always hold my breath waiting for Bella's patience to wear out, but she sees him for who he is. She loves him "warts and all". I think she sees that he still has demons to face, and would be healthier for doing so, but it won't change her love for him.

Their relationship and situation isn't easy. This story isn't easy, and that is what makes it so great.

Let's Get Physical, Ch. 2

I like the journey you have set Bella on. I think it is also an interesting test of your readers. I will be curious to see how they respond. Hopefully they don't see it as judgment on people who are overweight, but as a journey of someone who has lost their self-esteem and self-respect, and may not have been aware of it. For Bella, it takes her husband leaving to realize that she has focused her pain in negative ways. I will enjoy watching her not lose the weight, but gain her confidence back. To find her worth, not in her physical being, but in who she is. Find who she WANTS to be.

Looking forward to more!

Love In My Box, Ch. 16

Alice is married! Oh man. Edward is already mocking Jasper. It will be interesting to see how you choose to portray him in this.

I love the journey of these two figuring out physical intimacy after months and months of emotional and intellectual intimacy. I think your play of a mix of sexy and awkward is perfect for the two of them. My LOL moment for sure was in the car:

Bella is going to make me come in my car. If this wasn't feeling so fantastic, I would be mortified at the thought. Where's the um, emission, going to go?

"Oh, Bella, mmm, yessss!" I cry out as I come all over her hand, and unfortunately, my steering wheel. Well, I got my answer.

I love that his family is so overjoyed with the fact that Edward has a girlfriend, especially Esme. Poor guy. I love this couple. I really, really do.

Southern Charm, Ch. 27

We spent the first part of this story watching Jasper recover physically. Now we are getting into the crux of Edward's emotional healing. I am so happy that he and Carlisle came clean with each other. I don't think anyone outside of an abusive relationship can understand what it is like to wear the shoes. I am just so thankful that you have written such a wonderful support system and partners in Jasper and Esme for these brothers. There is a freedom in knowing you are loved so much. It allows you to strip yourself bare, to show it all, and know you will be protected.

There is so much past pain in this story, but the now and future are radiating with happiness.

Love, love, love it.

Tips for Better Living, Ch. 12

Once again, you have created a story that makes me think. Not to question the social acceptance of this May-October romance, but hoping that I always remain open to where I might find my next friend.

I love Edward's growth in this fic. He goes from careless and carefree to wanting others to have a good opinion of him. He starts looking past the now, and thinking about a future. Bella inspires him to be a better man. In the end, though, he is his own motivating force.

Bella also has her own quieter arc. She is closed and reserved at the start, but by the close, she has allowed herself to open up to another again. To trust. To allow herself the hope of desire.

Thank-you for once again sharing your gift of story telling. It was a lovely short story.

Twilight 25 Summer 2010

Is it wrong that I kept worrying the whole time that they were going to tip the bike? LOL! Little did you know that I have a piece on Bikerward/sper/whomever coming up. I now have another to add to my list!

Thanks for uniting smut and motorcycles. It's my kryptonite.