Let's Get Physical, Ch. 1-13
It would have been so easy to make Edward and Bella caricatures in the story you have set up. Instead, you have created two human beings. Bella is over-weight, but it is the result of negatively focusing her neglect and emotional abuse. She is not losing weight to get a man, she is doing it because it is the healthy thing to do. Now that her life has been rid of it's toxic element, James, she is working on becoming emotionally and physically healthy...for HER.
Edward as the personal trainer, could have been a brainless body. A mere object of her desire. Instead, we have an average guy who despite some shallow tendencies in the past is learning to question his ideals of beauty. He has some aspirations to do something musically, but really is not overly ambitious. It is refreshing to see an Edward that is not perfect nor broken. He just is.
The way you have built up their relationship, and their burgeoning feelings is well-paced. The mis-communications, or lack there of in some cases, has taken me on a wonderful roller coaster ride of emotion. I have genuinely smiled and achingly hurt for the two of them. Hopefully, the assumptions they are both working under will clear.
I loved this latest chapter, because Bella let herself be the confident woman she should be. She is finding her power.
It would have been so easy to make Edward and Bella caricatures in the story you have set up. Instead, you have created two human beings. Bella is over-weight, but it is the result of negatively focusing her neglect and emotional abuse. She is not losing weight to get a man, she is doing it because it is the healthy thing to do. Now that her life has been rid of it's toxic element, James, she is working on becoming emotionally and physically healthy...for HER.
Edward as the personal trainer, could have been a brainless body. A mere object of her desire. Instead, we have an average guy who despite some shallow tendencies in the past is learning to question his ideals of beauty. He has some aspirations to do something musically, but really is not overly ambitious. It is refreshing to see an Edward that is not perfect nor broken. He just is.
The way you have built up their relationship, and their burgeoning feelings is well-paced. The mis-communications, or lack there of in some cases, has taken me on a wonderful roller coaster ride of emotion. I have genuinely smiled and achingly hurt for the two of them. Hopefully, the assumptions they are both working under will clear.
I loved this latest chapter, because Bella let herself be the confident woman she should be. She is finding her power.
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