Fourteen, Ch. 1

I like what you have introduced with this story, but my eagerness to hit the next chapter link to keep reading was marred by the fact that you already gave away that Edward is going to redeem himself. I can't buy into the Edward you have set up, because you told me he is going to shift. Therefore, his character has lost his arch.

You are such a great story teller. I want to take the journey you create as you unfold it to me. :)