A Murmur of Fire in the Vein, ch 17-19
Chapter 17
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I was so happy to see Bella and Rose finally have a moment. Rosalie needs to get over the past, and just want her brother's happiness. I think it is apparent when they are together that Jasper is happy and light when he is around Bella (even if it is a drug induced lie).
The insight in to the Grandparents Hale was interesting. It sounds like there might be an air of judgment and standards that the twins have grown up with that Rosalie was able to handle, but Jasper wasn't. It's always a culmination of things.
Chapter 18
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OK, a lot of this is my own skeletons, but...Damn Jasper to hell. I have a feeling he has been using since the first night he showed up on Bella's doorstep. Damn him for his lies and selfishness. Damn him for dragging her into his quagmire of self-destruction. Most of all, fuck him for making her love him, just to destroy himself, and in turn her.
::deep breath::
You wrote this chapter very well. The desperation of Bella at the thought something was wrong with Jasper. I love that you didn't sugar coat anything. I could smell and feel the puke. I could see the blood and lifeless body. It was raw and gripping. Great writing.
Chapter 19
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The truth revealed. The drug abuser is a liar. Shocking.
It was interesting to see everyone's reaction. Well, not shocking that Rose was angry and blaming Bella. It was very kind of Alice to come to Bella's defense. It was like sisters in arms. Edward's revelation was revealing as well. That there is part of him that still desires to be the one for Bella. That lingering piece of love that allows you to only want good for the other.
Carlisle and Esme were very kind to take care of Bella's physical needs, and equally kind in offering their support in the future.
Now we'll see what happens when Bella faces uncertainty.
Chapter 17
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I was so happy to see Bella and Rose finally have a moment. Rosalie needs to get over the past, and just want her brother's happiness. I think it is apparent when they are together that Jasper is happy and light when he is around Bella (even if it is a drug induced lie).
The insight in to the Grandparents Hale was interesting. It sounds like there might be an air of judgment and standards that the twins have grown up with that Rosalie was able to handle, but Jasper wasn't. It's always a culmination of things.
Chapter 18
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OK, a lot of this is my own skeletons, but...Damn Jasper to hell. I have a feeling he has been using since the first night he showed up on Bella's doorstep. Damn him for his lies and selfishness. Damn him for dragging her into his quagmire of self-destruction. Most of all, fuck him for making her love him, just to destroy himself, and in turn her.
::deep breath::
You wrote this chapter very well. The desperation of Bella at the thought something was wrong with Jasper. I love that you didn't sugar coat anything. I could smell and feel the puke. I could see the blood and lifeless body. It was raw and gripping. Great writing.
Chapter 19
------------
The truth revealed. The drug abuser is a liar. Shocking.
It was interesting to see everyone's reaction. Well, not shocking that Rose was angry and blaming Bella. It was very kind of Alice to come to Bella's defense. It was like sisters in arms. Edward's revelation was revealing as well. That there is part of him that still desires to be the one for Bella. That lingering piece of love that allows you to only want good for the other.
Carlisle and Esme were very kind to take care of Bella's physical needs, and equally kind in offering their support in the future.
Now we'll see what happens when Bella faces uncertainty.
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