The Fallout, Ch. 20-21

Chapter 20
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I love how you used the past and the present to show the difference in how they resolve issues. You showed them at the worst of times, and how they started down the path of healing. Then we flash to the present as they force each other to talk out anger and sadness.

Then, you give us Jasper, and it turns out not only Jasper, but Bella too! How strong Jasper had to be to face down Edward, and tell him he had to wait and hear the whole story before he saw her again. Knowing everything Edward felt and is now feeling.

The second part of this tale is going to be more harrowing than the first, but it is going to be more external drama than emotional. The road back, if possible, is not going to be easy.

Chapter 21
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I love the gentleness that Jasper showed towards the mother and her child as he found his way to Maria's realm. I hope that they can find their way up to Forks. They deserve a positive community.

Seeing Jasper enter Maria's sanctum and witness just the crust of the horrors that is her underworld was heartbreaking. Knowing that he was feeling everything in that sheltered hell. To see that Maria wasn't only creating an army, but was breaking all vampiric law (as in the case of the Immortal Child). She was more powerful and completely unleashed, unlike before.

Then, to have found Bella, but not even Bella. A creature that once was Bella Swan. I am eager to see what she is now!